Friday, February 16, 2007

Revised poem

I thought about what theblank said about my poem. That it could be more creative. So I decided to revise it.

So here's the new revised version if my poem:

Kibble
Kibble
Kibble Kibble Kibble
Kibble Kibble
Kibble Kibble
Kibble Kibble Kibble
Kibble
Kibble
I really like Kibble.

I know it had some flaws before but now I think it's ok.

1 comment:

theblank said...

Nice revision. You are a born writer.